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Rick Barooah's avatar

then...

the girl woke on the next

swallowed the new

and made her go

before the show

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okay, that was probably terrible. Your poem's great, keep up the good work, and best of luck.

Daniel Bishop's avatar

Really enjoyed this, Iris. Nicely done

Lev Raphael's avatar

Wow. This is as surreal and dark as the Gary Numan's album "Savage (Songs from a Broken World)"--and I mean that as compliment.

Iris Shaw's avatar

I'll have to give that a listen.

erniet's avatar

Really great; your free-verse is marvelous...and I'm normally not a big fan of free verse!

Iris Shaw's avatar

That's quite the compliment - thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoy it.